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Jul. 20th, 2007 08:37 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png)
A bit of a teaser, I found a woman who bears a stricking resemblance to what Gwen looks like in her late teens/early twenties.
Picture here
If you've been paying attention at all, this'll probably make you raise your eyebrows a bit.
*giggle*
That's all.
Picture here
If you've been paying attention at all, this'll probably make you raise your eyebrows a bit.
*giggle*
That's all.
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on 2007-07-21 03:09 am (UTC)no subject
on 2007-07-21 05:07 am (UTC)Yeah...I'd been having these weird conflicting images of her ever since she first showed up in my head, sometimes with dark hair, other times with blonde. The other day, I finally figured out why.
God this thing's gonna eat my brain, I know it.
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on 2007-07-21 05:14 am (UTC)no subject
on 2007-07-21 04:42 pm (UTC)Naw I don't really have any qualms about it. The only thing I saw was that it sort of started out the same way a lot of your stories do; first person male narrative, leading into a flashback. But! It's a nit-picky style thing that's not really important.
I want to know what or who is talking to Gwen. grrr *fist shake*
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on 2007-07-21 05:01 pm (UTC)Ha. You're the only person I get real crit from, and I like that, as much as the girls may not.
first person male narrative, leading into a flashback
I actually wanted to do it in complete third person, in my opinion I SUCK at first person (it's insanely hard for me to write), but this story requires I do it occasionally. I may twist things around so it's not so much flashback, not sure yet.
As to what's talking to Gwen...once I finally write a scene that's supposed to go in between two others, it'll be insanely obvious. I hope. There's some things that need fixed in regards to that to. The scene that took place when she was three is completely wrong.