Getting my mind off it

[axeslade]

Trying to get myself off the drama. Here's a possible outline for the novelization of 'The Monster'




Introduction
-Tell the mythos of the monster (like in the form of a creation tale). It is neither good nor bad. Certain people ‘use’ it for good (by fighting against their abusers and making a point of not becoming abusive), while some use it for bad (becoming abusers). The things it says are not always meant to be derogatory, it is more to make a person strong though some are not able to resist it (playing the devil’s advocate? Need to develop this idea better…will come back to it). Needs a name.
-Show it passing through a few family lines to reach the father’s.

The Family
-Daughter: Rebecca. Eight years old at the beginning of the abuse.
-Show some interaction with the mother to see her denial of the monster’s existence (maybe she was abused too?)

Rebecca and Linzie
-Show more of Rebecca’s life after her father’s death (bad boyfriends, the relationship with her daughter [Linzie]’s father, etc.)
-Give more of a gradual buildup to Linzie’s abuse (showing Rebecca and Linzie’s very good relationship before this) and show more of Rebecca’s pain.

Linzie
-Work more from Linzie’s POV (much like how earlier parts will be written from Rebecca’s).
-Show more inner struggle in whether to tell or not (show the monster being a part of this decision to show some more of its good side).
-Show more of her struggling in the homes and the hospital.
-Will not end up committing suicide in the end.

Input, suggestions, crits, etc are all welcome and wanted.

Comments

Hm

[safilix-shark.livejournal.com]

The way you wrote 'The Monster' was really unique and different, and made a killer short story. Here's my sort of... critique, I guess. I'm not entirely sure it would make a very good story. Don't get me wrong, the concept is gorgeous, but I really don't think it has the pull to become a full novel, or even novella. It was sylistic and metaphorical on it's own. Personally I think stretching it out longer, would ruin it's dramatic impact.

Thats just my two cents.

Re: Hm

[axeslade.livejournal.com]

Thanks sweets. I sort of agree, that's why I'm testing the waters with ya'll since I trust you to be honest. Besides, I like having something maybe on the back burner to keep the ladies occupied while we're waiting on Bri for the next part of our project *girls head off to poke hers with sticks* hmm...those ladies ain't comin' back *giggle*

[spacequeen.livejournal.com]

Show some interaction with the mother to see her denial of the monster’s existence (maybe she was abused too?) I'm a little confused here, sorry! Isn't it a fact that both mother and daughter were abused?

[axeslade.livejournal.com]

Rebecca's mother. I know, the outline is/was clumsy (doubt I'm going through with it...I began to edit PAYD again last night, and that's going to take a lot of my energy)