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[axeslade]

A bit of a teaser, I found a woman who bears a stricking resemblance to what Gwen looks like in her late teens/early twenties.

Picture here

If you've been paying attention at all, this'll probably make you raise your eyebrows a bit.

*giggle*

That's all.

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[axeslade.livejournal.com]

btw, what've you thought of what you've read? I'm disregarding Bri's crit, as she's utterly in love with Gwen so is pretty much incapable of giving real crit.

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Are you sure you want my crit? hahaha.

Naw I don't really have any qualms about it. The only thing I saw was that it sort of started out the same way a lot of your stories do; first person male narrative, leading into a flashback. But! It's a nit-picky style thing that's not really important.

I want to know what or who is talking to Gwen. grrr *fist shake*

[axeslade.livejournal.com]

Are you sure you want my crit? hahaha
Ha. You're the only person I get real crit from, and I like that, as much as the girls may not.

first person male narrative, leading into a flashback

I actually wanted to do it in complete third person, in my opinion I SUCK at first person (it's insanely hard for me to write), but this story requires I do it occasionally. I may twist things around so it's not so much flashback, not sure yet.

As to what's talking to Gwen...once I finally write a scene that's supposed to go in between two others, it'll be insanely obvious. I hope. There's some things that need fixed in regards to that to. The scene that took place when she was three is completely wrong.